I like what this poem tells me of the grandparents. There is beauty and tenderness in all of this that I hope each reader sees it. I did completely. Good read!
Treasa, I'm choked up from you beautiful and tender poem. I'm a grandpa myself, but not yet sitting in that chair...and I don't smoke. The picture captured the mood and message perfectly.
Thanks so much Thomas. Tender moments like these, a thing of the past. I'm lucky if my husband shares a phone charger with me! Cheers for the restack :)
Treasa, this is such a wonderful poem. So tender and beautiful. And the ending is just amazing. If this were gymnastics I'd say you stuck the landing.
"And this is how it was between them,
each day a day long and forever a day young."
Thanks for that gorgeous comment LeeAnn. I see you're still in olympic mode, glad this one landed just right for you :)
I like what this poem tells me of the grandparents. There is beauty and tenderness in all of this that I hope each reader sees it. I did completely. Good read!
Thanks so so much Luis. They were such a sweet couple and I'm glad I could capture a glimpse of that.
i wonder what (if anything) will be our analog(s)
for these moments
this is a poem to be proud of, treasa
truly.
Thanks so much Seamus, appreciate your kind words.
your poems reach the heart treasa!
Thanks Mohika, that’s so sweet of you to say.
This is beautiful!
Thanks so much for the read and kind comment Nolcha.
One of my favorite couplets:
"A delicacy performed ’til the spring coil
hiccups back to its little lifetime again."
But the whole thing is so lovely. My eyes kept traveling back up to read it again.
Treasa, loved this beautifully observed poem, especially the last stanza’s complex clarity about time♥️
Thank you so much Sharon, I'm glad I could capture and convey a piece of their love here.
Beautiful piece Treasa!
Thank you so much and cheers for the restack, much appreciated :)
Treasa, I'm choked up from you beautiful and tender poem. I'm a grandpa myself, but not yet sitting in that chair...and I don't smoke. The picture captured the mood and message perfectly.
Ah thanks so much Sandy. He got the rocker for his 80th and never liked it but was too gentle and polite to say so.
This being in couplets just WORKS.
I do like symmetry :)
Fabulous, Treasa.
Thanks so much Thomas. Tender moments like these, a thing of the past. I'm lucky if my husband shares a phone charger with me! Cheers for the restack :)
The title had originally been 'Little lifetime,' it might still change. That couplet is my favourite too. Thanks Margaret Ann